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Mandrake · Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2004 6:28 pm Post subject: new RPGDX article by your's truly

http://seraphchild.com/urizen/fanfic.htm

bitch about it here. If I'm wrong about anything, or if you see retarded typo's that I didn't catch please tell me. I plan on doing one a week until I'm bored.
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Mandrake · Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2004 7:22 pm Post subject:

ok, just updated it with screenshots and links
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Happy · JonA's American snack pack Joined: 03 Aug 2002 Posts: 200

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i liked your article, and as everyone has grammatical or spelling errors they didn't bother me at all...

some ppl might get self-esteem from correcting errors...

valderman · Posted: Sat Mar 06, 2004 2:11 pm Post subject:

Nice article, though my english teacher would most likely crush your kneecaps for the first sentence Happy pointed out. ^_~
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BadMrBox · Posted: Sat Mar 06, 2004 2:27 pm Post subject:

I cannot complain about your grammar skills as I spell like a total A**whole myself and my sentences are usually kinda blurry. On the other hind, I could complain about the design of your article. You should not have text covering the whole screen like that. Its awful to read it like it is now. Have some space onn each sides. But, it is the article itself that counts and I find it a nice read. You even got me interested for a round of U4.
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Mandrake · Posted: Sat Mar 06, 2004 4:57 pm Post subject:

well thank you happy- although, i was looking for critiques, not looking for someone to be an egotistical ass about it. Your not welcome. Go fuck a stump.

everyone else:
thanks. yeah, many errors...but, meh, I'm working on draft 2, so that should be fixed.
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LeoDraco · Posted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 2:26 am Post subject:

In my opinion, a person's grammar is a window into two things: the person's effective intelligence, and how much the person cares about the written work. Let this not be a comment on the former, in respect to Mandrake; I believe he's quite the intellect.

However, in respect to the latter: much can be said about the quality of work; a poorly written piece of work is either not going to be read, or it is going to be mocked for its bad writing. Now, you would think that somebody who cared about their own writing would spend some time with a grammar/spell checker, going over the work to refine it all. Now, as the case is, this is not the precedence with Mandrake. Forum posts aside, Mandrake, you seriously don't present your work in a manner that says, "I care;" and if you don't care, why should we?

My only other critique/complaint about the article is the layout of the images that, for all affects, appear to be thrown in haphazardly. It seriously comes off as if you don't really care anything for the article. I have no idea why the images are included, nor to what games they refer to; the graphics could do with some spacing out. Some borders perhaps. And definitely, some captions.
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Rooter · Copyright Infringer Joined: 09 Feb 2003 Posts: 61

Wow, that is a truly terribly written article. I imagine your game will be of a similar quality.

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BadMrBox · Posted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 4:57 am Post subject:

I hope it was a joke. Rooter seems to be a guy with common senses.
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Rooter · Copyright Infringer Joined: 09 Feb 2003 Posts: 61

It was obviously a joke. I don't like Mandrake and the article was truly horrible but from what I've heard and seen it seems that his game could be quite promising.

janus · Mage Joined: 29 Jun 2002 Posts: 464 Location: Issaquah, WA

Man, is it just me or are some of the new people around here completely lacking in tact? I mean, I'm an asshole, sure, but some of these new people are totally crossing the line.

You should know better, Mandrake. ;)

Bjorn · Posted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 4:33 pm Post subject:

I agree with LeoDraco. The article seems to have gone through no effort whatsoever to reduce the amount of errors and present it in a nice way. I especially disliked the colors, much better would be specifying no color at all.

As for the contents of the article, it didn't seem very interesting as it was basically a list of all the games Mandrake played. Somehow I had expected more interesting "tales".

To Happy: Yeah, "adn_" to "and" is one of many autocorrections installed in the 'word censor' system. :-)

XMark · Posted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 4:56 pm Post subject:

Cool. I just went into the forum management options and looked at the list of corrections, then added my own, one that changes defin-a-tely to the correct word definitely (that is the one spelling error that annoys me the most on the internet)
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